I like it a lot. It's very good for a first time experience of a story.
However, I do hope you will also make individual pages available. I can't say I like the idea of clicking through comic pages to find The Page that I'm looking for as material.
Q: What collars do you plan on putting on the Demonic Twins Melody takes on as her first Dominatrix assignment? I still think she's biting off more than she can chew frankly. (Which might be beneficial to some hilarity later on.) But even one as "over?" confident as Melody will want some anti-strength or magic-hindering enchantment to keep the twins from overpowering her. She's clearly mostly human after all. And the twins are succubus's who've probably got internalized magic behind them. A dangerous proposition without countermeasures.
A: Given the twins' minor shape shifting ability and demonic sex drive, any sort of lust enhancement would be counter-productive in terms of controlling them. Melody will probably elect to use a particular mix of pain and dissociation known as a command collar. When the subject is given an order in a particular commanding tone, the collar activates. If the subject does not comply they will begin to feel uncomfortable. Anxiety and guilt rise and the master's command weighs down as the most important thing in the subject's mind, like a long neglected responsibility. If they continue to resist, a mild hypnotic dissociation begins to take hold. If they continue to resust, the subject may soon find that they have carried out their mistress's orders without realizing it.
Of course this is just a insurance measure. And it's a fine line between getting what you want out of a sub and violating trust. Part of being a mistress making your sub realize they want to obey, and to make them play your games rather than fight the referee.
Q: Curious, is the anti-pregnancy enchantment the only one on Alison? I'm sure the cuffs she used to wear where a form of restraint early on. But I'd imagine they'd want a way to reel her in if necessary. Then again, she is physically weak. So outside of leveraging her purpose or some slick trickery, she's not going to get out of a fortress full of demonic soldiers. (And frankly, she's just is not clever enough to pull off such deception. Stupid? no. But not brilliant either.)
A: Alison doesn't really need to be broken, she just needs a small amount of force applied - enough for her to use as an excuse to herself. Just a little push and she'll fall right where she needs to be, and that push is best applied the old fashioned way. Anything more would be at best a waste and at worst might upset her natural proclivities.
One possibility is physical compliance where the subject's body obeys but they retain control of their mind and are free to voice their objections.
You could also add in possession or "switchboard" type effects where sensations, motivations, and actions are piped around from various sources. Something like the sensation mirroring in Wetware, for example. Or the lust amplification in the presence of a particular demon, as seen in Dark Altar. A subject could dissociate while a spirit is summoned into her, either from within the collar or an external source. Varying degrees of "co-piloting" could occur.
Makes me wonder how many others one could come up with. You have yellow, cyan and purple, but that still leaves green, red, brown and potentially deep blue.
Roughly speaking, yellow makes disobedience hurt, purple addles the mind with the horny, and cyan makes you go along feeling as though you're watching it from outside as a passenger or spectator.
To invent the others... Red, to leverage emotion. Excitement and happiness for compliance, depression and sadness for noncompliance. Green, body restrictions. Inflicts paralysis when you try to disobey, so you can only choose between obedience and inaction. Probably by interfering with nerve signals, so could still move your face. Can't think of anything off the top of my head for the other two.
...looks like Allison's intensive daily sybian exercises have paid dividends making her expert at working a cock with her now well-conditioned to always be dick-hungry vadge!!!
Maybe she became part demon because of the pregnancy. You have to be at least part demon to be pregnant with a demon. It would be awesome if she got a tail too.
What I find most appealing about this sketch is the expression on Allison's face: a mix of pure dread on the one hand and awestruck anticipation on the other -- in utter disbelief at how enormous the cock is of the hypermasculine demon who's about to deflower her and destroy her little pussy!!!
LOL anyone else feel like the community vote did their bidding? I looked at the breakdown and just thought "wow... everyone perfectly captured my conflicted and nuanced feelings... much better than my individual votes could!"
Hooray for what got the most votes that we get to see! Also happens to be what I wanted to see... :-)