Wait wait wait...
Is it just me, or are the two looking rather simular?
I the Commander maybe using the same frame?
Hmmm, one way or another: lovely!

You've got me at hurk

Oh my gosh, did I really just... It is... I can taste it. Feel it in my tongue. Oh my gosh, so warm. So thick. So tasty. Oh my gosh, why do I think it is tasty? I shouldn't feel that... Or the... Pride? Do I feel proud for having ducked him like... a good girl? Why does it feel so... Hot? Why am I so hot? I want more. I need...

I like the idea. Would also be possible to close the circle to the other mercs that entered with her. Make her get to see them, make her see one serving as a pony girl, or have one massive monster beast (thinking of an Oger or a centaur) try to get to have his way with her or stand guard, while she recognizes him as a former merc, with nothing of the old self left in there but pure animalistic Lust for her new body.

Love this story but. And given tmwe been told the others now serve as beasts of burden to the army I would love to some Pic of what they look like new... Before and after so to say. And midway too!
As always excellent work and great storytelling!