I pick both Barbara and solari up for some fun, and during sex while I switch back and forth between the two lovely ladies. All I can think about is how much I want to be like them and be a sexy hooker
it does seem like a slight continuity error. At first I though she managed to escape by just slipping her hands out of the restraints but the image before this one shows that she had undone the chain/rope/strap that was holding her at the end of the bed so why would she do that if she could just slip her wrists out. Although lurker could very well be right, as the mistress does seem a little more submissive than her character has been established as. And this incident did occur right after slave girl crawled to the end of the bed to go to sleep.
You can't slip anything by us Admin, you have a high class audience here, we demand the highest of standards!
BTW do you have a general idea of the overall plot arc for the comic or do you just kind of make it up as you go along?
I absolutely love this comic, this story you have been telling... but I've got a bone to pick with the past couple pages.
Our hero here, in a fit of rebellion, is knuckles deep in the mistress. Where is the reflection we have seen in so many other pages? She is taking a big risk so her heart has to be beating in her chest. This is also the first time she is likely getting aroused in her new form. Doesn't she notice herself getting wet, her nips exect and rubbing on the back of the mistress. Or what about her fingers, she has to be having the odd new thought that she now can know what this feels like. I want to know about that experience (and it would give you an excuse to drag this foreplay out even longer ;) ).
Regardless if you take my suggestions I am thoroughly enjoying what I am seeing and can't wait till next week. THANK YOU!
I don't always have something specific in mind when I change the color palette, but I like the varied interpretations. As far as magical manipulation, conventional manipulation, or the transformation being more than skin deep - slave girl doesn't know so we don't either.
Keep in mind that since she's the one 'telling' the story, we might not be getting a completely honest assessment of her motivation.
On this page, I found that past tense allowed for some interesting ways to describe things. For example, if you convert the second paragraph to present tense it just doesn't work. Past tense makes the introspection a more believable.
Going forward, the past tense narration can be used to convey embarrassment and post-act rationalization. The thoughts can say "it's not like I wanted to" but the action can clearly indicate that she did.
Past tense narration is just a story telling convention, it doesn't mean that someone is actually telling the story. The New Fit ending was a joke on the convention. I don't think this: http://sexylosers.com/201.html sort of ending would be a good idea here.
I picked past tense narration because it made the most sense for the transformation scene. It's hard to get believable present tense thoughts from a character who is having some intense unknown experience. It would either end up realistic and not contributing to the story, ie "what the fuck is happening!" over and over again; or it would be implausibly level headed ie "hmm I appear to be losing consciousness".
I like the idea of the color scheme slowly changing as the sun sets but things get a little surreal with the reds in the middle of the comic. Also, I'm wondering what you are going to do with the past tense thoughts, it kind of takes the reader away from the moment to moment unfolding of them. Although I think it turned out well in "A New Fit" with the ending.
For what it's worth, I'm enjoying this a hell of a lot more than the typical "turned into a girl, suddenly too horny for self-control, oh I need a man, God I love being a slut" progression that has been so common in the genre. The fantastic quality of the artwork aside, I'm thrilled to see a much more tasteful approach being taken. And seduction does tend to work much better than brute force.
Why, anon? I'm loving the slowness of it all. The update speed could be faster, but I'm not going to complain if it arrives on a regular basis. It maybe even helps in a way, drawing it out. :D
and just to play Devil's Advocate... while I, too, am hoping the Mistress has a few 'tutorials', ultimately I want to see our little heroine snatched up by a man. But what ^^ they said. Not our story to tell. I'm just thrilled it exists at all.
Excellent series. I can't wait for the next panel! The artwork is fantastic and unmatched by any other free genderswap comics I've seen. And there's actually a story that's interesting to this one. I really appreciate the work.
