This is some really great art. Excellent story, too. Are you going to get beyond the strictly sensual in this story? "Allison" is some kind of soldier - a mercenary - and has been captured by "Demons." They don't seem all that demonic. The general concept of a demon is nothing but black and white. No possibility of being less than purely, completely evil. Vallochar and the other demon seemed to be a lot like ordinary people, not at all pure evil. Are you going to show any other aspects of the Demons' society? If Allison was a soldier, she probably knows something of empty-handed fighting, of the other mercenaries and what they are doing. Is Mistress Vallochar going to interrogate her? That could be ~interesting~ There's a lot about Vallochar's people that could be really interesting. I'd really like to see more than just the inside of her Mistress's house, but even that is really good.
